Feedback

We received feedback for our most recent draft of Women's Bane, and we have things that need to be changed to make our title sequence better...

-Shorten the sequence, as it's nearly three minutes long. 
This is too long for a title sequence, reviewing the sequence, we decided that a lot of the scenes can be cut/shortened; but will not affect how the narrative is presented.

-Remove the interactive typography.
This is because it does not well as well as we originally planned, some audience members did not even realise they were credits/members of the cast. So to avoid further confusion all credits will be edited in. 

 -Re-shoot the glass pouring scenes.
Using one hand instead of two, as it's more sexual, and to be more steady while doing so. 

-Performance
When at the protagonists house, Niamh drags the victim around - this could be changed to holding hands to make it seem more inimate.

-Alter the soundtrack 
To make it match up with the pace of the title sequence. It'll create more atmosphere and will make the whole sequence flow more smoothly - making it more enjoyable for those viewing it. 

-Use red wine
Although we agree in the sense red wine it portrayed to be more romantic and sensual, we cannot red wine; as there will clear visual that the victim has been poisoned.

However, all feedback is from fellow media students and our teachers - although they fit our
target age range, they are anaylising the sequence to find improvements, meaning they could not be paying attention to the narrative as much as non-media students.

Title Sequence Draft 2

       

This is our most recent title sequence draft, we have changed/re-shot some scenes and added the soundtrack. However there are still some mistakes and more changes could be made to make the sequence flow better.

Edited Soundtrack

Production Log

Where: Maddie H's house.
Who: Maddie H, Niamh and George.
(Due to our differing school schedules me and Kelly were unavailable to help film.)
Equipment: DSLRS, Costumes.
Purpose: Re-shoot.
Duration: 2 hours.

The lighting was bright on the day, which was meant we didn't require any lighting for the kitchen scenes. If it was dark,however, the scenes would not of been as successful - as the kitchen scenes were filmed in Maddie's conservatory.

There were no major health risks, apart from if one member dropped a glass. However, this was unlikely as we are careful when filming.

This was the final shoot for Women's bane before the final version, with the intention to slightly tweak our performance to improve our product overall. 
Only a few scenes had to be re-shot, such as:
-The corridor scene

- All drinks scenes (pouring, placing glasses...)

-Leading up to the bedroom also had to be re-done (as George wearing a different suit.)

Typography, what we decided on

The typography we decided on was:

‘BASIC FONT TITLE’ 







This is used for the opening credits/cast member names.

’NITE CLUB’ 









This is used for the title.

‘TT moons’  

This is used for the company name.

Sound

From the poll we decided to use Quirquincho for the soundtrack. However, we will have to mess around with the tempo and speed so it fits the pace of the sequence better. We chose it because of its simple yet slightly creepy undertone. We were debating between this and Gordo Jose, but the sound of the drums in that track washed out all of the other instruments.

Sound Poll