Feedback

We received feedback for our most recent draft of Women's Bane, and we have things that need to be changed to make our title sequence better...

-Shorten the sequence, as it's nearly three minutes long. 
This is too long for a title sequence, reviewing the sequence, we decided that a lot of the scenes can be cut/shortened; but will not affect how the narrative is presented.

-Remove the interactive typography.
This is because it does not well as well as we originally planned, some audience members did not even realise they were credits/members of the cast. So to avoid further confusion all credits will be edited in. 

 -Re-shoot the glass pouring scenes.
Using one hand instead of two, as it's more sexual, and to be more steady while doing so. 

-Performance
When at the protagonists house, Niamh drags the victim around - this could be changed to holding hands to make it seem more inimate.

-Alter the soundtrack 
To make it match up with the pace of the title sequence. It'll create more atmosphere and will make the whole sequence flow more smoothly - making it more enjoyable for those viewing it. 

-Use red wine
Although we agree in the sense red wine it portrayed to be more romantic and sensual, we cannot red wine; as there will clear visual that the victim has been poisoned.

However, all feedback is from fellow media students and our teachers - although they fit our
target age range, they are anaylising the sequence to find improvements, meaning they could not be paying attention to the narrative as much as non-media students.